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  1.    #1  
    Hi all,

    We are lauching a new PalmOS game in the marketting and english is not our 1st language, so I just want to know it you could help us to check if is something that sounds wrong or strange in the text below.

    This text is the text information found in download page.

    thanks for the comments, here follow the text to be checked and your comments are very welcome:


    Magiclick! for PalmOS is a puzzle board game based on the popular Minesweeper style but with a different strategy and advanced graphic features.

    In Magiclick the moves are timed. You need to find fast the free cells to get extra time bonus. You can open a set of pieces at the same time using the select feature.
    Magiclick! for PalmOS

    * Four difficulty levels: Neophyte, Sorcerer, Warlock and Necromancer
    * Online user tips/help function
    * Supports color, and high resolution screens
    * Works on all Palm Powered® devices including the Zires, Tungstens, Treos, and Sony Clies
    * Fun and great sampled sound effects.
    * Native Palm OS
    * Hall of fame for each level
    * MultiSelect: Drag the pen and open/mark more that one cell at the same time.
    * SmartMark: open all free cells of a same row and all will be automatically marked for you.
    * HiRes Animations:Small animations makes the game more interesting compared to other PalmOS board games.



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    Magiclick! For PalmOS is a puzzle board game based on the popular Minesweeper style but with a different strategy and advanced graphic features.

    In Magiclick the moves are timed. You need to find the free cells fast to get a extra time bonus. You can open a set of pieces at the same time using the select feature.
    Magiclick! For PalmOS

    * Four difficulty levels: Neophyte, Sorcerer, Warlock and Necromancer
    * Online user tips/help function
    * Supports color, and high resolution screens
    * Works on all Palm Powered® devices including the Zires, Tungstens, Treos, and Sony Clies
    * Fun and great sampled sound effects.
    * Native Palm OS
    * Hall of fame for each level
    * MultiSelect: Drag the pen and open/mark more that one cell at the same time.
    * SmartMark: open all free cells of a same row and all will be automatically marked for you.
    * HiRes Animations:Small animations makes the game more interesting compared to other PalmOS board games.


    This is how I see it sounding. I am not a English major though.
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    Magiclick for PalmOS! Puzzle board game based on the popular Minesweeper
    style with an alternate strategy and advanced graphic features.

    In Magiclick the moves are timed. You need to quickly free cells to get an extra time bonus. You can open multiple pieces at the same time using the selection feature.
    Magiclick for PalmOS!

    * Four difficulty levels: Neophyte, Sorcerer, Warlock and Necromancer
    * Online user tips/help function
    * Supports color and high resolution screens
    * Works on all Palm Powered® devices including the Zires, Tungstens, Treos, and Sony Clies
    * Fun and entertaining sound effects.
    * Native Palm OS
    * Each level contains its own Hall of Fame
    * MultiSelect: Drag the pen to open/mark more that one cell at the same time.
    * SmartMark: Open all free cells in the same row and they will be automatically marked for you.
    * HiRes Animations: Small visually stimulating animations makes the game more interesting then standard PalmOS board games.
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  4. #4  
    Quote Originally Posted by deanfx
    * HiRes Animations:Small animations makes the game more interesting compared to other PalmOS board games.
    sbject/verb agreement

    small animations MAKE(no 's')......
  5. #5  
    we should just get 1 draft going and if you want to edit it just repost it with the corrections
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    How to assist in the outsourcing of American jobs by TreoCentral.com.

  7. #7  
    damn your right. But lets be honest, the game shounds ****ty anyway
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  8. #8  
    carefull...off topic post. humor is forbidden according to toolkit.
  9. #9  
    Not off-topic. That's a job a U.S. contract Technical Writer could have been paid for. I wasn't implying a joke with the smiley. Just didn't want to sound too gruff.
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    Sell your game in California, and don't worry about it. English is a second language here.
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    Dutch
    You NEVER miss an opportunity do you?
  12.    #12  
    Hi All,

    Thanks for all your comments.

    I already updated the description using all the comments:


    Magiclick! for PalmOS is a puzzle board game based on the popular Minesweeper style but with an alternate strategy and added advanced graphic features.

    In Magiclick the moves are timed. In order to get more time, you must find the free cells quickly. You can open multiple pieces at the same time using the selection feature.

    Magiclick! for PalmOS
    • Four difficulty levels: Neophyte, Sorcerer, Warlock and Necromancer
    • Online user tips/help function
    • Supports color, and high resolution screens
    • Works on all Palm Powered® devices including the Zires, Tungstens, Treos, and Sony Clies
    • Fun and entertaining sound effects.
    • Native Palm OS
    • Each level contains its own Hall of Fame Hall of fame
    • MultiSelect: Drag the pen and open/mark more that one cell at the same time.
    • SmartMark: Open all free cells of a same row and all will be automatically marked for you.
    • HiRes Animations:Small visually stimulating animations make the game more interesting then standard PalmOS board games.

    also the live version:

    http://www.micromagiclabs.com/magiclick

    The updates take sometime to be updated in all servers.

    For those who tried the game: Any of you have any comments about the game itself? Bad points? Points to improve? Thanks all


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